The Force is Within You

Went to the theatre during Christmas, watching “The Rise of Skywalker”. The end of this Saga made me reflect on the past 42 years with Star Wars. In the back of my mind I have formed the most incredulous frightening thought of how our lingering life on earth corresponds with the living force within us all, and how it cements the very existence of mankind’s hell-on-earth.

To understand it further, my inner self started screaming at me to write it down. So here I am, writing this bizarre story, that may be the reason we are all here, in the first place.

Please enjoy my story :

THE FORCE IS WITHIN YOU

1358 BC – The Reign of Akhenaten ( formally known as Amenhotep IV )

August 30

It was a hot summer day.

An old man starred intently across the Nile River, patiently waiting for something. He was wearing a white Egyptian robe laced with gold. His long silver hair intertwined gracefully with his tinted beard. You knew by his appearance he was made of Royalty, maybe a Priestess of great status.

In the distance you could see a barrage of Egyptian Solar Ships headed their leisurely way towards him. Closer, it was evident two of the three ships were filled with children. Each ship was protected by an elite group of Egyptian soldiers. The last ship was covered in gold, gems and jewels. The large solar sails were made of best Egyptian cloth stitched with gold lace. The Royal crown of Pharaoh Akhenaten sparkled across the Nile, in the morning sun.

As the ships docked the children impatiently scrambled ashore. Each child respectfully gave the old man a hug. The entrance of the last ship was indeed of Royal status. The Imperial Guards made way for Queen Nefertiti and her entourage of female servants.

It was a time of unrest.

Seventeen days early King Akhenaten changed his name from Amenhotep IV to the great Pharaoh Akhenaten, to honour the one and only Sun god, Aten. Indeed restless turmoil filled the air. The Aten cult didn’t reflect the norm of many gods before, which divided his people.

Nefertiti stepped gracefully ashore poising like any queen would.

The old man bowed and said,” My dear Queen, I am delighted you took the time to relish an old mans request.”

Nefertiti offered her hand. The old man instantly kissed her gold ring with green emeralds. She smiled,”Oh my dear friend Horus, its been too long. It’s my pleasure to see you again. How’s your health ?”

“By the leading light of the sun god Aten, I’m stronger then ever, “ Horus said with dignity. He quickly changes the subject, “Please… follow me my Queen, everything is ready.”

Nefertiti nods,” Yes, lets get on with it, we have an important day for our children. Aten would be pleased.”

Horus leads the entourage to the sacred temple of the “Living Gods”, a grand pyramid made out of marble, outlined with sandstone statues of Nefertiti and the almighty Pharaoh, King Akhenaten. Its interior featured a large room big enough for a thousand people. The slanted walls marked with ancient religious hieroglyphics, each with large stained windows lined perfectly throughout, to allow the light in, but at the same time, kept out the intense heat. If you saw the pyramid in todays world, it would look strange to see these openings missing the tempered glass. It was thought the Egyptians didn’t have windows or mirrors, however the archeologists were wrong to believe this.

The marble floors tinted with emeralds and hints of gold, sparkled everywhere. These are the polished floors where the congregation of priestess and priestesses would sit on comfortably made cushions. The only chair, decked out in solid gold, faced centre with an elaborate Holy Alter behind it. The sacred room was meant only for the elite, but today the children of wealthy Egyptians and Queen Nefertiti’s were allowed in.

This was the first year, a special congregation, just for the children, in order to carry on the holy true “Word” of the one and only god Aten.

It was said :

‘The Word existed in the beginning: the Word was both present with God. Before creation and the Word was God. THEY were present with God in the beginning.’

The teaching to the children was important, to carry on the tradition of where our ancestors came from in the beginning.

Horus and Nefertiti sat in the middle with the children mingling around them, centre of the room. It was a relaxed congregation, allowing the freedom to speak out, if questions were raised, unlike the traditional sacred gathering by the Pharaoh Akhenaten, the King of all kings. However, the elite guards were nearby, full attention glued on the protection of Queen Nefertiti.

In a soft motherly voice, Nefertiti speaks out to the excited children,” My dear children of our one god Aten…”

Immediately, without question, the children stopped whispering from one to another. They knew, when Queen Nerfertiti spoke, all lips must be sealed. In loving respect for their queen, they abide by the unspoken rule.

Nefertiti continues,” It’s my pleasure to have you all here today. Our gracious priestess, Horus has taken his precious time out of his day to be with you. Please…come closer, let us listen to his teachings of the “Word”.

The Queen holds out her hand to Horus. Horus bows his head,” Thank you my dear queen, it’s indeed a pleasure to be here. I’m your humble servant.”

Queen Nefertiti nods.

Horus pauses, looking around him, then, with the biggest grin you can imagine,”My dear children of Aten, I am humbled by your appearance here today. Let us begin in pray.”

Everyone bows their heads.

Horus recites,” My dear Lord God Aten, the one and only God within the heavens above us, I praise you with all my heart and soul. We are here today, to honour your “Word”. The Word existed in the beginning: the Word was both present with God. Before creation and the Word was God. THEY were present with God in the beginning. Lead us onto you, straight and through, May our souls rest within the heavens of the afterlife.”

Horus paused. Deep silence.

Looking up he continues,” Let us begin my children…”

All eyes are glued on the priestess. The children anxiously waited for this day to come. Excitement filled the room. To them, it was like our Christmas day.

Horus continues,”This morning I’m going to tell you a story. A true story, of our ancestors and how our Lord God Aten guided them.”

And so the story began —

Our ancient ancestors are not of this earth, but come far far far away, from a lonely dying planet, you refer to as the heavens above. But, you would all be wrong. The heavens above and the stars you see twinkling in the night are not the same. Our ancestors called the stars above, the central universe of many universes. The lonely planet has a name.

We know it as SIRUS 5.

Sirus 5 lies precarious within the Sirius Cluster of the Alpha Canis Majoris Constellation. It’s a wonder our ancestors planet survived as long as it did, as it lies between two dwarf Suns and one active sun, known as “Sirius C”. If you look into the night sky, you won’t find the star Sirius C, as an explosion took place took place a long long long time ago. This massive universal explosion of a large star is called a “SuperNova”.

Today, you can only see fragments of that failing star.

It’s remarkable Sirus 5 so happen to be teaming with life, considering the harsh desert climate it must endure. Not like earth, water is scarce. Most of its surface was a sandy landscape with small patches of salt lakes, scattered throughout this scourging planet. Incredibly, one ocean snakes across its surface, with its width only a mere 300 kilometres apart. Somehow, an intelligent humanoid life form has merciful survived the harsh planet of SIRUS 5.

THEY were our ancestors, my children.

THEY (our ancestors) were present with our God Aten in the beginning. It was THEY who started our race of people, making us who we are today. Our Pharaoh Akhenaten and Queen Nefertiti are direct descendants of our ancestors and the almighty God Aten.

Horus pauses waiting for the children’s response. Their wide-eyed response spoke out clearly without words. Amazed and bewildered at the same time was an understatement. Horus breaks the silence and said,”Do you have any questions my dear children?”

Nefertiti’s youngest daughter, Meketaten, is first to speak out,” Are you saying God Aten and our ancestors were one ? I’m confused.”

“In a way, that’s true,” said Horus,” Let me explain further. Do you all agree Life and Death are connected and death is inevitable to the living ?”

The children nod.

“Good,”said Horus,” We also know to prepare our dead for the afterlife. However, this is what you don’t know. Between the realms of Live and Death, there’s a force of unspeakable power known as the “Cosmic Force”. Its been said, all the energy from the Living and dead (including our souls) feeds into the Cosmic Force. The Cosmic Force is also in direct connection with Black Energy. Black Energy is the Dark Force. As there’s good and evil on earth, so is there in the Cosmos. The Cosmic Force too, connects with the souls that have left their physical bodies.

However, did you know, there are a few living souls, where the force is strongest with them. THEY posse the gift.

It’s been written :

Thou energy from the Living Force, ATEN.

From ATEN, all things that have ever lived are the FORCE.

ATEN feeds into the Cosmic Force, binding everything and communicating to the strong few, now with the Force.

WE must use the Force for good and stay fast from Evil.

To us, WE are gifted by Aten, the ONE and only FORCE.

WE are now with THEY whom are with the WORD.

The Word ATEN existed in the beginning: the Word was both present with God.

GOD is ATEN, Our saviour in the living and afterlife.

Before creation the Word was God.

THEY were present with God in the beginning.

Thou art THEY who have the power with ATEN, with the grace of GOD ATEN, THEY are.

Our ancestors also taught us we’re all connected to the countless universes throughout time and space. As one universe dies, another is born through the force of what are called ‘Blackholes’, sucking up the energy of planets, galaxies and even Light itself, becoming victims of there own demise.”

Another child speaks out,”Black Hole ?”

“Yes my child,” said Horus,” Think of the eddies in the River Nile. Swirling waters that can suck you to the bottom of the river. We all know not to swim by the swift current of the River, not to mention the crocodiles patiently waiting for the unsuspecting victim. From birth, you’ve been taught to stay away from the rivers edge and the swirling waters, known as ‘eddies’. The forces of the swirling river will indeed drown even the strongest swimmer. Think of eddies as Blackholes. The only difference is, Blackholes are massive forces of nature, sucking up stars and planets. Even light can not escape its cosmic force.”

Horus looks at his students. He takes a minute to let it all sink in, then continues,” In the scriptures, it is written by our ancestors :

‘As the One is connected to the [Cosmic] Force, so are THEY. THEY and the ONE are together, as one, since the beginning of time. All the energy above and below are connected. WE are ONE of many. ‘

The children are becoming impatient, fidgeting and whispering amongst them. Horus stops and says,” That’s enough teaching for this morning, my children. It’s high noon and time to eat. Please…go ! We’ll continue afterwards. “

All the children race off with a burst of energy. To them, it’s play time.

Nefertiti looks concerned, “ Horus, my dear friend. Do you think they understand? Or is it too much for their little minds?”

“My dear Queen, the children are smarter then you think,” said Horus,” They will absorb it all and take it with them in life. Some may be confused now, but after several teachings, even the slow will pick it up. Wait. You’ll see. This afternoon I’ll introduce them to our priestesses Meritaten, your eldest daughter. She will amuse them all with the Force”.

Nefertiti smiles,”Oh Yes ! I’m sure of it ! Won’t our children be surprised.”

“Indeed,” Horus said,” Indeed they will my dear Queen.”

In the heat of the day, the children are protected by the interior of the sacred pyramid. They all gather around Nefertiti who is now sitting in the Pharaoh’s golden chair. Horus is at her side, as are the Imperial Guards.

“My children, “Nefertiti said,”This afternoon Horus and I have a special treat for you. Now, I’m not talking about sweets. No. I’m talking about entertainment, just for you. Let me introduce you to my eldest daughter Meritaten – the sacred one loved by Aten. Meritaten has just finished her training and is now a priestesses adored by Aten.”

The children cheer !

Nefertiti summons her daughter with the sacred staff. Hitting the floor twice, Meritaten enters the room. She is wearing high laced leather boots, a see-through light Egyptian robe (without any restrictions)

gathered by a thin leather belt. Her leggings are close to capri pants women wear today. On her head she’s wearing a light Egyptian gold-plated helmet itched with scriptures on the sides, covering her ears. To protect her, she’s wearing a breast plate of thin gold, lined with jewels. The armour is indeed impressive and stylish – fit for any priestesses. Meritaten is a young tall woman in her twenties, thin but strong. It was common, Meritaten and her mother Nefertiti were mistaken for each other. Neatly tucked into her helmet, you could barely see her jet-black braided hair. Her eyes were the same colour as her moms, emerald-green. They were sure to captivate you, by luring you into her spell.

Meritaten kneels and bows to the Queen.

“I am here at your request, my Queen Mother of Egypt. May the force and glory of Aten be at your side,” said Meritaten.

“I’m delighted you have come to show our children what you have learned. Please begin,” said Nefertiti, as she motions one of her guards to be her apponenant.

Excitement feels the air.

The guard pulls out his razor-sharp sword, lunging at Meritaten with all his might. Meritaten sidesteps before the sword could cut her in half. He whirls around with another swipe, missing his opponent. Meritaten kicks him in the back, making him tumble to the floor.

In rage, he rushes Meritaten.

It’s as if everything is in slow motion, the guard charging, as Meritaten puts out her hand. A blast of unseeable energy throws the soldier back the distance of the room, tumbling head over heels across the floor.

The children gasp!

To see the FORCE in action was indeed exhilarating. It all seem like magic.

Nefertiti slams the sacred staff down. It is finished. Both opponents face the Queen and bow. Meritaten removes her helmet, leaning it on her hips.

“What a wonderful display using the force,” exclaims Nefertiti. She gets off the Royal chair and gives her daughter a warm hug, “ I’m so proud of what you’ve accomplished,” as she looks into her eyes. A mother couldn’t be any prouder.

The children once again cheer.

“That my children is a demonstration using the power of the force,” said the Queen,” It’s time to once again follow Horus to the centre of the room, so he may teach you further. Please go !”

The children scrambled away, like hungry hyena‘s, ready to pounce on their prey.

“This afternoon I’m going to teach you more of the sacred scriptures and how our ancestors were here before we were even conceived,” said Horus,” Please sit.”

As told, they quickly sat down, waiting eagerly for the priestess message.

“Good,”smiled Horus,”I’m so happy you complied. Let’s begin.”

And once again, the story continued —

“ A long long long time ago, our ancestors came to earth with Lord God Aten.

THEY and the WORD saw the earth teaming with life.

And God saw that it was good.

Then God said,” Let us make mankind in our image,

In our likeness, he and THEY made them;

Male and female he created us.

From the animal of Apeman THEY transformed us into THEM.

THEM, THEY and God ATEN were now in the same image.

God blessed THEM and said to THEM, “ Be fruitful and increase

in numbers ; fill the earth and subdue it.

“We children are them,” Horus said,” WE are the new creation.

We are human beings. Any questions?”

One child speaks out,” What were we before?”

“Good question my child,” Horus smiles,” Aten transformed us

from Apeman to human beings with the help of our ancestors.

Our ancestors, like Queen Nefertiti, are superior beings to us.

They are an advanced intelligent civilization, which simply

means they’re generations ahead of us. Here’s a new word for you

to ponder over,”genetically-advanced”. With time, human beings

[us; them] will slowly advance too. In the meantime, listen to

our scriptures :

Thou appearest beautifully on the horizon of heaven,

Thou living Aton, the beginning of life!

When thou art rise on the eastern horizon,

Thou has filled every land with they beauty….

Thy rays encompass the lands to the limit of all that thou hast made….

When thou settest in the western horizon,

The land is in darkness in the manner of death…

At daybreak, when thou arisest on the horizon,

When thou shinest as the Aton by day,

Thou drivest away the darkness…

“Any more questions my children?” Horus looks around at the curious eyes. He noticed one puzzled,” You!”

The shy child within the circle pops up surprised,” Me?”

“Yes you, my child,” said Horus,”What’s your name?”

“Your highness,” the child said,”My parents call me Neferneferuaten. It means ‘Beauty of the Beauties of the Aten.”

“Yes, of course it does, Horus said,”You look puzzled. Do you have a question?”

“Ah…I think so,” Neferneferuaten says,” May I ask how we are part of the force ?”

“Of course you can Neferneferuaten,” Horus said,” Our soul, our heart, our living energy inside is part of the force. We are only a small part of energy throughout the vast countless universes. When we die, we all join the force as one. However, there are a few living souls that are gifted with the force while living amongst us. THEY are with ATEN. Your mother, Queen Nefertiti is a direct descendant of THEY, our ancestors. That means, you may obtain the force and not realize it yet. THEY can speak directly to ATEN. “

“Can you speak to Aten ?” said Neferneferuaten.

“I pray to Aten my dear child,” Horus smiles,”I don’t have the living force in me, but your mother, Queen Nefertiti does. I can only talk directly to our God Aten, when your mother or King Akhenaten is present. Maybe one day, you will be able to connect to the force. It will be then, you too will be able to speak directly to Aten. I’m just a messenger. I translate Aten’s wishes to our people. Only the holy have this privilege. It takes years of training and prayer to become a priestess. “

Horus pauses, “ Do you understand what I’m saying my child ?”

Neferneferuaten nods,” I think so…”

“Good,” Horus says,” Good. Ok children. There’s one last thing I must teach you today. There’s bad and good in our world. Then there’s evil. Evil is the darkness. The dark side. It’s the dark energy I was talking about. It’s up to us not to be swayed by evil and do good. Be good and wish no harm upon others. Treat every living thing with respect and always pray to our God Aten. You may not hear him, but he can hear you. If you’re the chosen one, he may let you hear him. He’s always watching, so be good onto others, as you want others to be good to you. Do not judge, or you too will be judged. For in the same way you judge others, you will be judged, and with the measure you use, it will be measured to you. “

Nefertiti stands up,”Let’s give Horus a warm thank you. Head to the ships, I will be with you shortly.”

The children one by one give Horus a hug and then race off.

“Should’ve we told them why we’re here in the first place? “ Nefertiti folds her arms.

Horus bows to the queen,” With due respect my Queen, we don’t want to scare them. When they’re older, I believe they’ll understand. After all, if they knew our souls were placed here on earth because their souls were rejected within the cosmic force, due to past lives, I’m sure they would become bewildered and sadness would fill their hearts. If they realized this is living-hell-on-earth, they would feel empty with despair. This is why we must slowly teach them the Word. Only with the Word, can they enter through the afterlife free of conscious, towards the centre of cosmic force. We know that we are of God, and that the whole world lies in the power of evil. We are here to start over again until we get it right. How many times, I don’t know. Unfortunately there’s isn’t anything fair upon the living. We are tested to achieve a better self worth of our living souls.

Nefertiti nods,”Maybe in time, some will get it right, while others still may be under the spell of evil. I hope for their souls ; they will become closer to the living force of good and abstain from evil.”

“ Yes my dear Queen,” Horus agrees,” That’s why you and our ancestors are here. To monitor our progress. Some of us may not make it. Millions of us may die here on earth, only to be reborn again, and again, and again. If evil sweeps the universe, that universe will be destroyed, so a new one may once again start. It’s a cycle of birth and rebirth ; life and death. We can only pray our souls will grow into Nirvana :

A state in which our mind and soul are enlightened as to the illusory nature of the self, transcends all suffering and attains PEACE.

It may be hell-on-earth right now, but there’s hope. Hope for the betterment of mankind. Betterment of our souls. “

“The Force is Within You”

THE END – 3932 words

By Bari Demers – I hope you enjoyed my latest story. In all, it took me 5 days of 4 hr days to complete it. Writing takes so much energy. Each story I write has a hidden message and sometimes refers to another story. I’m not the religious type, but I feel we do have a soul and that soul has an energy of good and evil. We must find the good in us before we destroy ourselves. We must find NIRVANA – our soul must be at PEACE with its self, in order to continue in the cosmic order of things. You may call it GOD, I call it ENERGY.

Peace out ✌️ Total word count : 4020

Writers Life

Writers Life

Writers Life – it’s not glorious and the most part not rewarding to everyone. However, it’s part of me. Writing and art drives my inner soul – it’s me.

The above photo says it all :

10 THINGS People Say to Creative Writers ( But shouldn’t)

1. So you’re still writing your little book/poem/etc.?

2. Must be nice not having a real job.

3. Writing doesn’t sound too difficult.

4. I always thought I’d write a book after I retire, once I have some time to kill.

5. Wait a second, creative writing degrees are a real thing ?

6. Have you been published yet ?

7. Can I be a character in one of your stories?

8. So I have this great idea I think you should be using in your book…

9. Aren’t writers just professional liars ? They tell stories for a living, after all.

10. You’re writing a book ? Tell me everything.

Here’s more :

11. So what do you do in real life ?

12. How many books have you published so far ?

13. How come you’re not famous, like Stephen King ?

14. Oh, com’n ! Everyone knows how to write a story.

I believe all writers can relate. I’ve heard it all. A writers life has little support unless it becomes a blockbuster movie or a Best Seller. When I first decided to publish a book, I was pretty naive of the whole process. On top of that I wanted to write a cookbook.

What was I thinking?!

Getting sucked into self-publishing by dishing out $5000 to a self-publisher, I was still optimistic. Had these grandeur thoughts of becoming a Best Seller, selling millions of copies across Canada and United States.

The reality is more prevalent ; “Canadian Recipes of the Great White North” sold just enough to get my money back. On a positive note, it reached the UK, Australia, Germany and Japan. In Canada it sold locally and I also received requests from United States.

I found out quickly, self-publishing is thrown into the mix of hundreds of millions of other cookbooks. Not only is it expensive, your book selling on-line or a conventional bookstore takes a whopping 40 – 45 percent of your earnings. On top of that ( this may happen to you) the publishing company is constantly up for sell to larger publishers. On an average, self-publishers either sell or go bankrupt, due to competition. To add insult to injury, if the publisher is sold ( which happened to me) to an American publisher, the USA will make you pay taxes on any book you sell. Sure – you can get it back, however the process is daunting. You must fill out a five page report w/ all your personal information and then send it to a box office number. No way ! A Box Office Number ? That just doesn’t seem legit to me.

SO – You see, it’s not worth the hassle. I’m sure they do that on purpose. If it was a lot of money I would go to a lawyer, that way you’re protecting yourself.

The above “10 Things People say to Creative Writers” is so true, it’s scary – lol.

When I say cookbook, they go…”Oh…it’s just another cookbook. You’re NOT a writer.”

Meanwhile I write tons of science-fiction to reality short-stories that could possibly be made into a book. But now I’m pessimistic to the whole publishing routine. It’s clear, the only way to get your manuscript out is to send it in for submission. Submissions sound promising doesn’t it ? Sorry, it’s not that simple. First and foremost you have to find a publisher willing to take your manuscript. Second, it most probably lay on a pile of emails or deleted, due to the first couple of sentences they may read. The reality is, you may never get your manuscript to publishing.

What I’ve learned :

  • Write because you want to tell your story. Never write thinking you’re the next J.K.Rowling.
  • Write for yourself, maybe others will appreciate your work.
  • I write not to impress others.
  • I write because it’s my inner soul, it’s what I feel inside. It’s part of who I am.
  • Writing is a burning passion others may not understand. Only writers understand.
  • Try NOT to become disillusioned or depressed. Just realize the ‘Arts’ is extremely competitive and the most part unrewarding.
  • Only write if it comforts you. YOU find it personally rewarding.
  • Don’t expect to become the next best seller. There’s a ton of politics involved in that scenario.
  • Write from your heart. Never mind what others may think. It’s your story. Tell it as it is.
  • Read and read more…

I believe I’ve covered everything. You may want to add on to this list. I would love to hear your story.

Have you read my short-stories or screenplays ?

My Stories

My Art

Anyway – I thought this post of “10 Things People say to Creative Writers” is a prefect example.

Do you know, if Stephen King didn’t get notice for his book “The Shining” by a movie producer, he wouldn’t have become as famous as he is. However, his horror genre was a big hit to cult followers.

Getting your written work or art recognized is like winning a lottery, or its politically driven by artsy-class people and publishers. IF by chance your book is recognized by a movie producer or director, then it’s easy-street for you.

My Thursday Thoughts…

Bari Demers – screenwriter and storyteller

Life of a Writer

Robotics on Mars by Bari Demers

Lately, I’ve spent most of my time cleaning up some of manuscripts and short stories. Writing and rewriting is truly the goal towards the finish-line of a masterpiece, no matter if you’re writing screenplays, manuscripts for your next book, or short stories.

It’s also just as important to send yourself a draft of your work, to ensure no one decides on plagiarism. Sometimes my drafts are between 7 – 15 rewrites, to where I feel satisfied.

As I may be satisfied with my finished product, the publishers I send it to, are not necessarily convinced with my finished product. Another fresh pair of eyes could possibly bring a brand new perspective, I’ve never considered.

So never feel offended just because you have so much passion in your art. Not everyone will have your back.

On top of that, the idea of presenting your work to your immediate family, believe it or not, isn’t the best choice. With social media today, we’re fed with thousands of articles and news feeds, our lives are literally bombarded with too many reading options.

IF that doesn’t get you, (in my case) it’s essential your reading viewers are lovers of science-fiction, science and horror. So you see, the viewing class gets shorter and shorter.

BUT – if you can grab true hardcore science-fiction fans, it’s all worth it in the end. It truly is the LIFE OF A WRITER.

This past week, my passion is rewriting Robotics on Mars, as it’s close to my heart. Here’s the beginning to wet your whistle…

Robotics on Mars by Bari Demers

ROBOTICS ON MARS – CHAPTER ONE

It’s all true. All of it. You know what I mean.

In the back of your mind you’ve always wondered if those conspiracy theories could possibly be true. You know the ones I’m talking about ?

Yes…those.

The ones where conspirators rant about ALIENS living on Earth 🌏 or Mars. I’m sure you’ve heard about our Ancient Alien Ancestors visiting, way before mankind had a foothold. Or how about those crazies who unwillingly became abductees, complaining about being probed. Maybe you’ve seen UFO sightings yourself…

Which ever the case may be – Its all true.

Most importantly, government officials, including public organizations, such as NASA, SPACEX, and SETI have quietly kept a lid on it for years. Seriously…have you ever wonder how students in a high school science class can make a replica satellite for only $6000, while the real ones from NASA range from $10 – $40 million dollars each? Anyone with a brain can see the red flags for themselves. All they have to do is look past the smoke and mirrors.

“If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it probably is a duck.”


I hope you enjoy it. Come on over to the darkside of SciFi – Please read more of ROBOTICS ON MARS here.

by Bari Demersscreenwriter and science-fiction buff

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SCIFI FRIDAY

Happy Friday Everyone!

I decided to rewrite one of my scifi stories on a different format other then WordPress in the attempts of allowing viewers to “gift” my efforts, if they choose to do so. Here’s the first page of the First Chapter of my Scifi online Book.

I hope you enjoy – CLICK HERE

Follow along here or on my new platform for continuing short stories in each Chapter of my online Book.

Thank you,

Bari Demers – screenwriter ” I envision a story and bring it to Life” BMD

PS – I hope you enjoy my latest art piece above.

Also : BLACK ANGELS “Pride had cast him down…Oh to Scared Earth. A Black Evil has spread across the Lands…O to the HORROR of Earth.

It’s inevitable!

BLACK ANGELS : A science-fiction horror genre based on the arrival of our Ancestors and how it changed mankind forever!

Screenwriting – The Ten Finger Pitch

 

James Montana Scripts by Bari Demers
 
My last assignment was about developing character outlines

NOTE: My assignments aren’t in chronological order. The order is not relevant in this case. Also, I would like to point out, you too can join in on the free class,” AN INTRODUCTION TO SCREENWRITING UEA (UNIVERSITY OF EAST ANGLIA)” if you’re interested in screenplay formats and outlines, to build a screenplay from the foundation. 

Please read about the instructors in my last assignment HERE.

Carrying on, my assignment today is the Ten Finger or Two Handed Pitch.  I’m using my screenplay MISSING UP NORTH to systematically point out the Ten Finger Pitch. 

MISSING UP NORTH is a drama about survival. A young hunter who wants to impress his peers, inadvertently goes missing from his hunting party, alone in the rugged harsh wilderness. Instead of being the hunter, he becomes the hunted, as a savage Grizzly hunts him down. This story means a lot, because it’s a true story about me, fearing for my life, as this savage beast hunted me down in the heart of the Chilcotin Country.

MISSING UP NORTH – 10 point outline :
1. Genre : Drama 

2. Main protagonist: A young Hunter goes on his first hunting trip with his friend. After all these years, he’s finally allowed to join the hunting party.

3. Goal: To prove he’s capable of pulling his weight and hunting in a harsh environment.

4. Obstacle: He’s becomes lost with knowledge of a rogue Grizzly nearby.

5. Reason of the story : This is based on a true story about me, fearing for my life, completely lost in the harsh unforgiving wilderness of the Chilcotin Country, realizing an ornery Grizzly was systematically hunting me down. 
6. Young Hunter heads out on his new adventure, unaware of what awaits him in the next 48 hours.

7. The protagonist has complete trust in his friends judgement, not realizing the consequences of his actions.

8. The young Hunter is faced with the realization, he’s indeed lost. Unaware of the true dangers lying ahead, he’s confronted with the Grizzly, in the most frightening way possible. All he knows, he doesn’t want to die. 

9. It’s a true test of survival, racing against the threat of time, the harsh conditions of the wilderness and the impending danger of the Grizzly. 

10. Obstacle after obstacle, with death breathing down his neck, the only thing on this young hunters mind, is to stay alive.  The brute force of nature against the strong “Will to Live”. 

In number Ten, I’m suppose to give the conclusion of what happens in the end, but I purposely left it out, because my screenplay is protected by the WGA registration, and most importantly I don’t want to give out the story. That’s what, going to the movies is all about.

You can READ more about protecting your screenplay HERE. I highly suggest you do so before screenplay submissions. 

Anyway.  There you have it.  My 10 Point Outline – MISSING UP NORTH

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My Story  

The reason I find this an invaluable source of material, is simply because, I started off as a self taught screenwriter. The only education in this field was my course on literature during two years of college studies at Okanagan College. Believe you me, my first screenplay was a horrendous mis-match of what NOT to do. After sevens years of trial and error of screenplay submissions, I learned the hard way of making a nice polished screenplay. I suggest you take as many courses that you can in the field and of course, when comes along FREE, take it ! 

I’m taking this screenplay course because of two reasons, first and foremost, it’s FREE and secondly, I’m always checking to see if there’s something I missed. 
But there’s one thing you can’t change, and that’s the “human preference factor”. No matter what you do, always expect a high rejection rate when submitting your screenplay. It could be as simply as the person who’s reading your story, may not suit the favourable genre agents are looking for. 

Also, don’t do what I started off by doing. 

Don’t tackle science-fiction screenplays ,because overall they are considered the most expensive to make in the filming industry. This is why you see most screenwriters who want their scifi thriller to hit the screen, end up making it on their own. They’ll get backers with a lot of money in their pockets, ready to invest in the movie.  

Myself.  I haven’t figured that out. 

Good example is screenwriter and producer Neill Blomkamp.  Born in Johannesburg, South Africa, he pursued his dreams, when his family moved to Vancouver, B.C.   After Vancouver Film School, his first break was working on the TV series of the Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer’s Stargate franchise.  Finally, he was ready to make blockbuster science-fiction movies (all, which I truly enjoy) such as, District 9, Elysium and his latest, Chappie.  

Check out his credits and amazing accomplishments! 

As character Dr Gillian Taylor (played by actress Catherine Hicks) of the Star Trek IV: The Voyage Home would say,”So you see, that, as they say, is that.”
Making a short screenplay about your personal experiences is most likely the way to go.  A story that pops out as unique  or a real event. Like my screenplay, MISSING UP NORTH.  

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By Bari Demersscreenwriter and freelance writer

The Passion of Legends – David Bowie

  
Today is a sad day to hear the passing of legendary David Bowie. His passion for music, without any doubt, made an impact on our artistic culture.  

When an artist dies, it brings me deep sorrow.  

The loss of a gifted human being touches the very soul of my aching heart, because I realize that person won’t be able to express his or her love anymore. Of course, their art will live-on through music, photography or writing, but the person will be gone forever.

I say this,” Damn our short life! Seriously, there must be more than this?  Otherwise the evolutionary human being is nothing more than a cruel joke throughout the ages of millennium.”

So, that’s why it’s so important that we follow our passion.

Whatever your passion is, follow it and never ever give up, no matter what others feel or think. It’s not always about money. The passion within you will speak for itself and others will follow. Everyone of us, including stars and musical wizards, had to start from somewhere.  

If it grabs you, never let go!

Passion is the love of life; without it you’re plagued with emptiness. Your soul will reap with happiness the very moment you begin pursuing your dreams.  

Whatever it takes, give it all you got!

From the very depths of your soul, bring out the creative YOU, as precious and unique as a snowflake. There’s only one of you, the mould has long been destroyed. Some of us are gifted more than others, even considered prodigies, but that doesn’t mean it’s time for you to give up.

No.

It only means you must try harder.  The burning passion within touches the very core of your soul.  

You must express it!  

It constantly taunts you forward, the minute you awake, to the minute you fall asleep. But then there are times you can’t sleep because a word, an image or a phrase lures you to pick up that musical instrument, that brush, that pen, to begin exploring that whimsical thought dancing in your head and boasting it to the world.

So, reach out and make yourself known. Expressing your artistic self may touch the heart and soul of other human beings, just waiting for your spark of life.

Today, I give my heartfelt tribute to David Bowie, a man who expressed his love for music. While his passion captured the world, leaving his fans ecstatic for more, David Bowie’s kindness touched everyone.  

It’s in deep sorrow I express my loss for David Bowie, a true legend.  Thank you David for enriching our lives and soul. You will be missed.

By Bari Demers 

PS – Here’s what I said on my Twitter account @jrobbmontana, ” I would also like to express the sad loss of David Bowie . When I hear an #artist is taken away from us, it’s a very sad day.#musicians #DavidBowie #UnderPressure @DavidBowieReal youtu.be/fCP2-Bfhy04 ”

Enjoy this YouTube clip featuring David Bowie, Annie Lennox and Queen – it’s superb !

A Special Thanks To My Friends

  
My project this past week is related to PART ONE of the video pitch for my screenplay BLACK ANGELS. Writing is where I feel comfortable, so when tackling a video, it’s great to have a helping hand from my friends. 
I would like to thank the generous opportunity by Adam Pass, Romeo Durscher and Mark Johnson, including NASA and Dan Pogrebnoy.  

Without them, I would never be able to present awesome photos, scenic film clips or the concept art illustrations. Their generosity has made a big difference and I am very grateful.

ADAM PASS is a Professional Visual Arts Photographer. I had the opportunity to see Adams work during their team expedition of the Adobe Pre-Photoshop World, in Nelson, Nevada. Their adventure took them into Death Valley, California ( approximately a two hour journey northwest of Las Vegas). Impressed by Adams artistic abilities and skills, I was motivated to write this article, showcasing Death Valley’s desert terrain, featuring his work.  

You know that immediately feeling when you come across a gifted talent artist? 

Well, Adam’s work is exactly like that. Not only are you moved by what you see, but what you feel. Without physically being at Mesquite Flat Sand Dunes myself, Adam captured the very moment when the desert displays it’s serene beauty – Breath-taking!

Take the opportunity to learn more about Adam Pass. 

  
ROMEO DURSCHER – Oh what can I say about Romeo ?  

He’s one of the most kindest I can honestly say I have met on social media, without actually meeting in person. Yes, you heard correctly. The first time I virtually met Romeo was during the amazing broadcast launch of Little SDO, heading to study our one and only, life-giving star, our Sun.  

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Little SDO is a Solar Dynamics Observatory satellite, sending back NASA incredible valuable information, videos and amazing photos of our Sun. Including life-saving data for our astronauts, the countless satellites orbiting earth and the real effects of a CME ( Coronal Mass Ejection) on earth.

Romeo was the Senior Manager of Little SDO for 13 years, including an important part of the Education and Public Outreach Team, educating the public and reaching out to kids about STEM ( Science Technology Engineering and Mathematics) through the use of Camilla Corona.

When I first approached Romeo on NASA’s Little SDO Facebook page

I’ll admit, I was a little sceptical, unsure of his response. In regards to my research, I asked about the science behind Little SDO and the effects of earth from our Sun. 

Truly, I expected the typical generic answers, but Romeo was different.  

He took the time and patience to educate me throughout the years. Indeed, his patience was tested. I found a true friend where art and science works in harmony.

With his passion in science, he took the time to educated us with the humor of Camilla Corona. With that, I too joined in with my “take” of humor, showcasing that little rubber duck of science. Along the way, a group of fans have collaborated together across the world, like our friends, Virma ( the V Force) and her sister, Glady’s ( GG – the Supergirl ), Jim ( the Area 51 guy ) and Gayle ( the Australian American Corespondent ) and so many more, I’m afraid I would need six pages to express all the fans.  

  
But you know who you are, and I’m enjoying the Facebook friendship.

  
Today, Romeo is an DJI Educational Director, working across the world with DJI Global. You most likely saw Romeo on “Good Morning America” and didn’t even realize it. But once you recognize Romeo again, you’ll most certainly say,”Hey? I’m sure I’ve seen this guy before!”  

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And most likely, you have.  I like to call Romeo – The Adventurer Guru

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Romeo’s long time friend, Mark Johnson both collaborate with the operation of Visual-Aerials. Their website says it best,” Mark Johnson and Romeo Durscher are two long-time California friends who recently discovered a shared passion for the joy of piloting remote-controlled “cam-copters.” Aerial Visual is the adventurous side to flying drones. 

MARK JOHNSON is Principal and chief creative officer of Visual Law Group, a litigation communications and forensic animation firm headquartered in Silicon Valley.  Mark is also a founding partner in Fat Monster Films, a film production company located in Los Angeles.

Introducing myself to Mark, it wasn’t long before I was greeted by a compassionate man. After knowing Mark through social media, I soon realized we both shared a dark sad past. We both have had the misfortune of losing a child. With me, i lost my daughter, Jenni and Mark loss his son, David. Any parent loosing their child knows this is an unbearable painful experience, effecting you for the rest of your life. They say you will eventually forget as life moves on, but that analogy is simply not true. We, and many other parents, are in this club we never ever wanted to be apart of in the first place. But it does give comfort to know Mark and I are not alone. 

I’m always heading down to Vegas on a yearly bases and I know Romeo and Mark make frequent pit stops into Sin City offering workshops on flying DJI drones, from safety, regulations to the fun part, taking valuable video footage and superb aerial photography. It could be, one of these days, we may all meet in Vegas. I’ve yet to get my hands on a DJI drone. They sure look like fun ! 

UPDATE : 2017 

Mark just recently got engaged to a wonderful person, Abbe Lyle.  Abbe is a professional photographer and member of:

  • PPA – Professional Photographers of America
  • NAPP – National Association of Photoshop Professionals
  • WPPI – Wedding & Portrait Photographers International
  • AMA – Academy of Model Aeronautics

What I know of Abbe on FB she’s certainly a great match for Mark and what I read, she’s compassionate and a caring person. Thank you for your new friendship, Abbe 😎 

I would like to say : Congratulations to Mark and Abbe ! 

Mark and Abbe love going to Las Vegas as much as me and I suspect one of these days we’ll all meet up in Vegas baby 😎

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VEGAS INTERMISSION 

Talking about Vegas, my wife and I have visit Vegas as part of our regular holidays since the 1980’s. We are considered “Vegas Lovers” intrigued by the city that never sleeps, the comfort offered by the mega corporate hotels, the fine dining options and world-class entertainment. My Facebook page Vegas Reviews says it all. When I first started Vegas Reviews, it was more about reviewing the good, bad and ugly. 

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But now Vegas Reviews has developed into more about expressing about the FUN we have in Vegas, showcasing 1000’s of photographs and countless useful tips. Our emphasizes concentrates on giving good reviews to ONLY the best wonderful resorts in Vegas. If it so happen we had a bad experience, we just simply never talk about it. From there, you can pick and choose from the very best list, dependant on your lifestyle or pocketbook. 

Come join us on my Facebook page for the endless fun in Las Vegas!  

BACK TO APPRECIATION 

My appreciation also goes to NASA’s library of valuable information. NASA courtesy offers its viewers use of royalty- free video clips, as long as they are NOT commercial related. Thank you NASA! 

Last but defiantly not least, is DAN POGREBNOY. An amazing artist for his science-fiction artwork, known as concept art illustrations. I must point out that his work is available under this copyright format, in order to share. His artistic ability would be an asset to Hollywood productions and Dreamwork Studios. 

Check out more about Dan Pogrebnoy

  
IN CONCLUSION 

Without the helpful generosity of my friends, I wouldn’t be able to make my video’s. I’m presently working on PART TWO of my BLACK ANGELS PITCH, where you will see some impressive aerial photography by Romeo and Mark. Whereas, in PART ONE , is the remarkable photographs by Adam Pass. Thank you once again Adam Pass for allowing me to exclusively showcase his amazing photography. 

AND 

  
Without further ado, here’s my video – BLACK ANGEL PITCH – PART ONE. I hope you enjoy. 

by Bari Demers screenwriter and freelance writer