Life of a Writer

Robotics on Mars by Bari Demers

Lately, I’ve spent most of my time cleaning up some of manuscripts and short stories. Writing and rewriting is truly the goal towards the finish-line of a masterpiece, no matter if you’re writing screenplays, manuscripts for your next book, or short stories.

It’s also just as important to send yourself a draft of your work, to ensure no one decides on plagiarism. Sometimes my drafts are between 7 – 15 rewrites, to where I feel satisfied.

As I may be satisfied with my finished product, the publishers I send it to, are not necessarily convinced with my finished product. Another fresh pair of eyes could possibly bring a brand new perspective, I’ve never considered.

So never feel offended just because you have so much passion in your art. Not everyone will have your back.

On top of that, the idea of presenting your work to your immediate family, believe it or not, isn’t the best choice. With social media today, we’re fed with thousands of articles and news feeds, our lives are literally bombarded with too many reading options.

IF that doesn’t get you, (in my case) it’s essential your reading viewers are lovers of science-fiction, science and horror. So you see, the viewing class gets shorter and shorter.

BUT – if you can grab true hardcore science-fiction fans, it’s all worth it in the end. It truly is the LIFE OF A WRITER.

This past week, my passion is rewriting Robotics on Mars, as it’s close to my heart. Here’s the beginning to wet your whistle…

Robotics on Mars by Bari Demers


It’s all true. All of it. You know what I mean.

In the back of your mind you’ve always wondered if those conspiracy theories could possibly be true. You know the ones I’m talking about ?


The ones where conspirators rant about ALIENS living on Earth 🌏 or Mars. I’m sure you’ve heard about our Ancient Alien Ancestors visiting, way before mankind had a foothold. Or how about those crazies who unwillingly became abductees, complaining about being probed. Maybe you’ve seen UFO sightings yourself…

Which ever the case may be – Its all true.

Most importantly, government officials, including public organizations, such as NASA, SPACEX, and SETI have quietly kept a lid on it for years. Seriously…have you ever wonder how students in a high school science class can make a replica satellite for only $6000, while the real ones from NASA range from $10 – $40 million dollars each? Anyone with a brain can see the red flags for themselves. All they have to do is look past the smoke and mirrors.

“If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it probably is a duck.”

I hope you enjoy it. Come on over to the darkside of SciFi – Please read more of ROBOTICS ON MARS here.

by Bari Demersscreenwriter and science-fiction buff

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I have a vision…


What happened to them?

I believe I have the answer… my science fiction story BLACK ANGELS expresses the question mankind has asked since the beginning of time.


In this answer my story follows a drug addicted war hero seeking revenge for his brothers death, willing to risk his crew in a mining expedition on planet AIPHA XL 420 ( known to us as EARTH). It’s essential they find a priceless RED CRYSTAL in order to save their species from a deadly virus.


MISSION : By order of King Osiris, his elite team, the ROYAL EMPEROR GUARDS are sent to a newly discovered planet, ALPHA XL 420 (known to us as EARTH) to mine a life saving drug known as the illusive RED CRYSTAL. It’s vital they find it, mine it and ship it back before a deadly virus wipes out their species.


Led by war hero Commander Cardin, along with eight military specialist and two A.I. androids, their mission is clear. Don’t come home until you find the most valuable crystal in the universe – RED CRYSTAL.

Adding to the dangerous mission, it’s been reported, their long time rivals, the JOTUNNS were recently spotted in the same solar system.

Commander Cardin will stop at nothing to honour his brothers death during the longest war in SIRIANS history – RED STORM.


Destroying a colony of JOTUNNS would allow his brothers soul to be released on his journey into the afterlife, following the all mighty GOD ATUM.

Unknown to the crew, a creature, only spoke in folklore as BLACK ANGELS, possess planet ALPHA XL 420, spreading its evil darkness upon the earth.





The fate of the SIRIANS – it’s inevitable.

Priestesses ISIS,THE GODS of SIRIUS, must protect her people at all costs.

Will the crew be able to save their species ?

I have a vision and this vision has already been written into earths history, long before mankind had a foothold on earth.

Let me tell you the story of BLACK ANGELS – our Alien Ancestors.

By Bari Demers – screenwriter

Alien Covenant Review


Finally had the opportunity to watch ALIEN COVENANT this past month and I must say it was a little disappointing. Following Alien franchise since the beginning, the storyline is important to me. My first outburst of the movie was on Twitter :

“Saw @AlienAnthology #VFX astounding but #storyline upsetting. Astronauts have strict protocols. What happened, shouldn’t #AlienCovenant”

Let me explain :


Any one hand-picked for a mission responsible for 2000 colonist, heading for distant planet Origae-6, would (in my mind) be highly trained Astronauts with strict protocols. Their responsibility is the welfare of colonist and not some rogue beacon on an unknown planet. Life-form or not, the DAVID android would make note-of-it, sending a electronic message back to earth through MUTHUR (MUTHUR is the Starship’s on-board main A.I. pronounced M-O-T-H-E-R).

If we were on Star Trek, Mr. Spock would definitely say,” It’s NOT logical. To make critical errors in judgment, threatening 2000 colonist is indeed unlikely.”

BUT – it’s a movie, meant to add precarious irrational decisions, causing complete havoc with no return. That’s what makes a movie exciting.

Screenwriters are trained to follow a specific Screenplay Outline, as are Directors. But Directors have the freedom to change whatever they want, as long as it makes a substantial profit at the box office. Here’s a quick layout :

1. ACT ONE – Establishment | Setup | Inciting Incident | Contemplation | Turning Point

2. ACT TWO – Acceleration | Enter Obstacles | Dead Centre | Crossing the Rubicon | Raising the Stakes | Crisis

3. ACT THREE – Prepare for Confrontation | Climatic Conflict | Aftermath and Resolution | Dissolution and Farewell

See HERE for in-depth detail.

The point is, there must be some kind of conflict and a series of mistakes to add tension to the movie, or else it would be pretty boring. For example, the real events and mishaps of Apollo 13 turned into a good movie, because the astronauts and NASA had to solve real problems in a dangerous environment. The iconic words, spoke the urgency…

“Houston, we’ve had a problem…”

It was indeed a life or death defining situation, where the whole world followed in their survival and safety back to earth from the moon.

That said, it’s vital the storyline makes sense or it becomes a jumbling mismatch puzzle with incoherent timelines, making us viewers grasp for reality. Knowing all to well Ridley Scott is a master Director, it seems ludicrous he wouldn’t tell a good storyline. After a little research, it wasn’t long before I realized the editing process of cutting scenes from Alien Covenant, proved to be the culprit. Ridley Scott’s creativity was hacked by removing crucial scenes by the editors involved. As a director I would be biting my upper lip, as scenes were eliminated.

Curiously, Ridley Scott still has full control of his movie.

So why did he approve of the Covenant crew making so many mistakes? Is it just a Hollywood ploy, to make fans see AWAKENING in order to get all the answers?

To me, this is how I would change the scene to make it work :

It would make more sense if android DAVID caused the INCIDENT, where he sent a deadly beam of energy disrupting the starships point-of-origin. It would be better then a random wave of CME ( Corona Mass Eruption) from a nearby star, as it happens in the movie. The scenes from that point would still hold true ; waking up the crew and killing their captain, due to a malfunction of his pod. In my mind, the burst of energy could have crippled the Starship to no return, causing it to crash on the planet where David is patiently waiting to carry out his deranged assault on the crew still alive. Crash landing on this planet would have made for a gripping terrifying scene.


I love the fact Alien Covenant continues 10 years after my beloved movie Prometheus, so well executed by Ridley Scott. Personally watch Prometheus a dozen times to pick up eastereggs* I may have missed.


To me I really don’t understand the backlash of Prometheus from fans. I realize the original ALIEN was basically a B-movie horror-slasher, but with its strong storyline and well executed ( pun intended ) actors, Alien did well at the box office. It was like this secret little gem waiting to be opened. That said, it’s my belief the fans of Alien, Aliens and so on, expect a horror slasher unconcerned about the science-fiction, the actual science and the clever plots Ridley Scott placed into Prometheus. It’s clear Ridley Scott caved to the wishes of its ALIEN fans, giving them the blood thirsty slasher ALIEN COVENANT.



If you followed Prometheus, you would be familiar with our lovely character Elizabeth Shaw, the last human surviver, along with David. We know Elizabeth doesn’t trust David, but she needs him to fly the Engineers Starship in order to answering the burning question she asked the Juggernaut,” Why did YOU (The Engineers) change your mind? What did we do wrong? Why do you want us dead?”

If I were Elizabeth, my trust in David would be nil. After fixing David and his ability to set course for Engineer’s HOMEWORLD using one of many alien Derelict spacecraft 🚀, I would immediately place David in stasis before doing the same myself. Any kind of tampering of my hyperbaric sleep chamber, would immediately set off an emergency alarm with instant release from stasis. So, in effect, Elizabeth would still be alive when Alien Covenant crew arrives, meaning a whole chain of events could take place.

I love the FINAL LOG of Dr. Shaw :

Elizabeth’s Final LOG, last survivor of Prometheus :

“The ship and her entire crew are gone. If you’re receiving this transmission, make no attempt to come to its point of origin. There is only death here now, and I’m leaving it behind. It is New Year’s Day, the year of our Lord, 2094. My name is Elizabeth Shaw, the last survivor of the Prometheus. And I am still searching.”


In conclusion, overall Alien Covenant seems to have gain support by the majority of fans, and in the end, that’s what really counts. 21st Century Fox covered the production budget cost of $97 million (reasonable, considering other scifi movies) making $238 million in sales.

Not bad, not bad at all.

I’m sure Ridley Scott was relieved he hit the mark for fans and certainly Fox must be pleased too. As a long time fan of the Alien Trilogy, can’t wait to see the release of Alien: Covenant sequel AWAKENING, apparently starts production in 14 months. If I had a choice of Directors for my Scifi BLACK ANGELS, Ridley Scott would be on the list. However, there’s a growing list of great Directors suited for my proposed film/pitch.

Bari Demersscreenwriter Read more of my stories and articlesEASTEREGGS*- Here are some neat (yup I used the word neat…sorry) little eastereggs you’ll find throughout the ALIEN TRILOGY.


Nefertiti and Black Angels

The ART piece of Nefertiti and its relationship to Black Angels by Bari Demers.

About Nefertiti:

As you see above, my art piece is the Egyptian Queen Nefertiti, Royalty of the Pharaoh Akhenaten dynasty. However, you can see a remarkable change, including her alien eyes, I cleverly crafted.

Queen Nefertiti is indeed a historical wonder, as there isn’t any trace of a tomb where she may lie today. One recent theory was believed her secret grave might have been hidden beneath the Tutankhamun’s tomb. Unfortunately, a radar scan preformed by a National Geographic team, turned up no visible trace.

The other theory is ( according to Wiki ) “…Nefertiti ruled as Neferneferuaten after her husbands death.”

Whatever may be the case, their dynasty, indeed, was in turmoil.

Nefertiti and Akhenaten ruled together from 1353 to 1336 B.C. Their New Kingdom of the 18th Dynasty turned controversial, due to the upheaval of a new religious structure, where only ONE GOD, ATUM was introduced, rejecting the earlier Egyptian beliefs of many GODS. After their deaths, the Egyptian Priests defaced all transcripts and monuments, changing back to the original worshipping of, “The Gods of the Heavens.”

Unfortunately today, archeologists are having a rough time trying to solve the mystery of “Where does the Tomb of Nefertiti lie ?”

It may be as simple as tomb robbers have already taken the riches, fading into history. Optimist I am ( sound like Yoda – lol Read also Obi-Wan) it’s my belief it’s just a matter of time before they solve the puzzle behind our mysterious Queen Nefertiti.

Graphic Art Explained:

The before image ( as you see) is the original artifact, presently on display at the Neues Museum in Berlin, Germany.

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My transformation of Nefertiti took over 8 hours, into the image you see now. There are several stages of intricate artwork to transform my art of Nefertiti into the goddess for my genre science-fiction horror screenplay Black Angels.

I’m NOT a professional graphic artist but a freelance screenwriter. Even still, I do have two years of Applied Arts from Okanagan College in Kelowna , BC, Canada 🇨🇦(way back in the 70’s). Since then technology and graphic art techniques have changed drastically with the help of computers. If I were to restart my career today I would apply at the Visual College of Art and Design (VCAD) in Vancouver. Here they provide excellent courses on Visual Effects Art and Design, Graphic Design, Game Development and Design. Maybe then I would be accepted at MPC Film ( Movie Picture Film Company), also in Vancouver.

As they say,” It is what it is”, meaning I can’t change my history.

However, any ART I do is often an expression of who I am inside. Be it, writing my science-fiction stories or painting, it means so much to me personally. Maybe one day I will be as famous as Picasso, like so many dead artist are. Who knows?

The Relationship of Black Angels :

Lately, my concentration of my art is simply to promote my screenplay Black Angels. I want my audience (scifi fans) to envision my characters within my storyline.

BLACK ANGELS – “Pride had cast him down..O to Sacred Earth…a Black Evil has spread across the Lands…O to the horrors of Earth.” BMD

It’s inevitable.

Black Angels is a science-fiction horror genre based on the arrival of our Ancestors and how it changed mankind forever.

Nefertiti is a descendant of Queen Siri .

Queen Siri is believed to be one of “The Gods of the Heavens” who traveled here from Planet Sirius 5, within the Canis Major Constellation.

Even though ancient Egyptians built remarkable architectural pyramids, they still weren’t the true gods from the heavens. Even though the “Gods of the Heavens” did visit earth, they left due to mysterious reasons. I believe my screenplay has cracked the case on what really happened to our alien ancestors. Queen Siri was a descendant of the true gods, who helped the human Egyptian race to form their ancient culture. After the “Gods of the Heavens” disappeared, they tried to imitate the gods as best as they could, but still were not as effective as the gods were.

The pyramid structures of today are a good example of this.

Nefertiti was indeed a real Egyptian Queen and a legacy to the Egyptian history. Even though she was descendant of Queen Siri , only Queen Siri and her crew were responsible in transforming us human beings into what we are today. It’s my believe, theses gods were a highly advanced civilization who discovered earth over 150,000 years ago, in the time mankind was still trying to get a foothold on earth. With cross genetic manipulation, man’s evolution was fast forward into the creation of a different kind human race. Different in, if mankind continued on without altering our genetics and followed the evolutionary timeline, it would have taken man another two millions years to develop correctly.

It brings into question, “why we are the way we are today?”

Today, it’s obvious how a destructive race of human beings we can be. Our history and religion surely shows our cruel vindictive selfs. Maybe if the “Gods of the Heavens” were here today, guiding us into a better race of people, (we so far miserably failed) we may have become a more peaceful respectable human species, without war, crime and deceit.

Unfortunately, something terrible happened to our true ancestors and it’s my belief my story of Black Angels explains their fate. It may be, they’re secretly here on Earth – you never know!

I hope you enjoy my ART and stories. Please support my efforts by either purchasing my art or gifting within my stories.

By Bari Demers – screenwriter and storyteller 960 words

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Happy Friday Everyone!

I decided to rewrite one of my scifi stories on a different format other then WordPress in the attempts of allowing viewers to “gift” my efforts, if they choose to do so. Here’s the first page of the First Chapter of my Scifi online Book.

I hope you enjoy – CLICK HERE

Follow along here or on my new platform for continuing short stories in each Chapter of my online Book.

Thank you,

Bari Demers – screenwriter ” I envision a story and bring it to Life” BMD

PS – I hope you enjoy my latest art piece above.

Also : BLACK ANGELS “Pride had cast him down…Oh to Scared Earth. A Black Evil has spread across the Lands…O to the HORROR of Earth.

It’s inevitable!

BLACK ANGELS : A science-fiction horror genre based on the arrival of our Ancestors and how it changed mankind forever!


We are Illogical 

The Okanagan- My Home
Today, as I write, ‘We are illogical’, I have arrived in the sunny Okanagan Valley of British Columbia, Canada 🇨🇦. Throughout the fall and winter months you’ll find me feverishly writing science-fiction thrillers and assorted screenplays, such as BLACK ANGELS (ready for release) and short stories, like Android Alisha. But during the months of June, July and August, you’ll find me at my summer home, partaking in outdoor activities within our Canadian oasis, well known by celebrities across North American. In fact, as we speak, there’s a couple of filming crews setting up in Kelowna, BC. This may be the summer home for the rich and famous, but to me, it’s simply where I was raised as a kid. It’s indeed my home. For Canada 150 or your next vacation I highly recommend you take a visit to the sunny Okanagan Valley of British Columbia, Canada 🇨🇦.

Black Angels by Bari Demers

My creative art of writing can be referred to as the ‘Vincent Van Gogh art-impressionist-style’, left with secret hidden messages throughout each paragraph. Writing is an expression from my inner soul, hoping to make a difference to my readers, as they begin to explore the plots and twists behind my stories.

Throughout my life I have questioned our reality.  The how and why of our very existence is indeed intriguing, leading me to believe the possibilities of a higher intelligence far surpassing our own. I like to refer them as our ancestral GODS, who have left behind visible landmarks and scriptural clues. It’s even speculated the GODS of the Heavens may have altered our DNA and evolutionary timeline, making us who were are today. 

With the ways of our human race, it frustrates me to no end, “Why do we react in such an illogical behavioural pattern, causing physical harm to others, over our proposed belief in religion and/or power ?” 

As Mr Spock would say,” “May I say that I have not thoroughly enjoyed serving with humans? I find their illogic and foolish emotions a constant irritant.” 

Writing is my passion and speaks out to our foolish ways, thinking we have complete control over everything. Where, in reality, we are nothing more then a small dot in the evolutionary timeline, waiting to be exterminated by the forces of nature, much more powerful then we could ever comprehend.  

Our historical past is extremely violent, as is our present day. From dictatorship to religious fanatics, its remarkable our human species hasn’t yet been terminated. We are indeed an illogical species, forgetting about the needs of the many and too many of us are self absorbed in the needs of the one. 

We are illogical. 

It’s my hope my grandchildren will one day explore the fruits of our universe while building the foundation of their generation into a more stable civilized society expressing the love for others. If not, it’s just a matter of time our species will become extinct, like our predecessors, the dinosaurs. 

Maybe one day, millions of years in the future, another carbon-based species will find and decipher today’s article, taking heed to the warning signs of our demise. THEM, being an advanced civilization who were nurtured by millions of years of unaltered evolution, they may wonder how these savage human beings ever survived at all. 


Maybe today, the younger generation will read this article, realizing the fate of mankind, taking steps to eradicate the diseased virus of being self absorbed and begin a brighter future for all of mankind, where freedom is for all, wars no longer exist and the meaning of peace and love is for everyone. It will also mean we must explore other worlds, in order to remove the hardships of Mother Earth, as our footprints continuously places havoc on our planet’s fragile environment. We can be the loving caretakers of earth 🌏 and other M-based planets we visit, realizing our world is a living breathing entity of life, essential to our own well being. We still have a chance to grow into responsibility human beings with the potential to become caring individuals who takes our ‘footprint’ on earth seriously. If not, we may never repair the harm we’ve placed upon on our own beloved planet, we call HOME. And, if so, we don’t have an right to eject our human-virus onto other planets

Kelowna BC by Bari Demers
We are illogical but we can learn to be so much more. Sadly, we have the potential, but never seem to use it for the betterment of mankind. 

By Bari Demersscreenwriter and storyteller 

PS  If you enjoy my stories please join me here and subscribe for more storylines.  If you so happen to be a director or film producer and interested in reading my screenplay BLACK ANGELS – contact me below.  It’s indeed a story of how mankind became to be who we are today – Let’s make my screenplay into a blockbuster Scifi Movie. 


Out of this World Vacation

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May I suggest planet Proxima b 

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It’s just a short journey and considered the closest star to our Solar System.   On the upper-right you will experience the wandering Alpha Centauri AB.  If you love water sports, Proxima b is sure to guarantee an active stream of sports.  For a little R & R take in the restaurants, pools and spa’s at the prestigious Proxima Hilton Interstellar Resort.

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By Bari Demersscreenwriter and freelance writerDREAMS and REALITY 

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