Life of a Writer

Robotics on Mars by Bari Demers

Lately, I’ve spent most of my time cleaning up some of manuscripts and short stories. Writing and rewriting is truly the goal towards the finish-line of a masterpiece, no matter if you’re writing screenplays, manuscripts for your next book, or short stories.

It’s also just as important to send yourself a draft of your work, to ensure no one decides on plagiarism. Sometimes my drafts are between 7 – 15 rewrites, to where I feel satisfied.

As I may be satisfied with my finished product, the publishers I send it to, are not necessarily convinced with my finished product. Another fresh pair of eyes could possibly bring a brand new perspective, I’ve never considered.

So never feel offended just because you have so much passion in your art. Not everyone will have your back.

On top of that, the idea of presenting your work to your immediate family, believe it or not, isn’t the best choice. With social media today, we’re fed with thousands of articles and news feeds, our lives are literally bombarded with too many reading options.

IF that doesn’t get you, (in my case) it’s essential your reading viewers are lovers of science-fiction, science and horror. So you see, the viewing class gets shorter and shorter.

BUT – if you can grab true hardcore science-fiction fans, it’s all worth it in the end. It truly is the LIFE OF A WRITER.

This past week, my passion is rewriting Robotics on Mars, as it’s close to my heart. Here’s the beginning to wet your whistle…

Robotics on Mars by Bari Demers

ROBOTICS ON MARS – CHAPTER ONE

It’s all true. All of it. You know what I mean.

In the back of your mind you’ve always wondered if those conspiracy theories could possibly be true. You know the ones I’m talking about ?

Yes…those.

The ones where conspirators rant about ALIENS living on Earth 🌏 or Mars. I’m sure you’ve heard about our Ancient Alien Ancestors visiting, way before mankind had a foothold. Or how about those crazies who unwillingly became abductees, complaining about being probed. Maybe you’ve seen UFO sightings yourself…

Which ever the case may be – Its all true.

Most importantly, government officials, including public organizations, such as NASA, SPACEX, and SETI have quietly kept a lid on it for years. Seriously…have you ever wonder how students in a high school science class can make a replica satellite for only $6000, while the real ones from NASA range from $10 – $40 million dollars each? Anyone with a brain can see the red flags for themselves. All they have to do is look past the smoke and mirrors.

“If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it probably is a duck.”


I hope you enjoy it. Come on over to the darkside of SciFi – Please read more of ROBOTICS ON MARS here.

by Bari Demersscreenwriter and science-fiction buff

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Our Living Hell

PRIDE had cast him above all others.

Darkness slowly absorbed his soul.

Lambs of his Cult are blinded by all the GLORY.

In their EYES, he could do no harm.

As if a KING, he becomes narcissistic, filling his ego with worldly pleasures, ignoring the poor, the sick and vulnerable.

Cloaked as an Angel of Light, the shadow of EVIL spreads across the EARTH.

He is but a MAN, absorbed in his own glory.

Little does he know, he is just one of many.

He is nothing more then a pawn of life, covered in his own waste of greed.

O to the HORRORS of mankind – DARKNESS has filled every corner, every seed of life.

What was right, is now wrong.

What was wrong, is now right.

The living are now the DEAD.

AS I pass through the ‘Valley of Life’, something stirs inside of me.

Something is wrong, but I can’t see it, I can’t taste it, I can’t touch it.

I can’t say what it is, but I know something is seriously wrong.

Is it a DREAM or is it a NIGHTMARE ?

Suddenly, I open my EYES…and there it is, as plain as day.

My heart is filled with tears of sorrow.

OH my dear GOD, I AM awake.

WE are in the VALLEY OF DEATH.

I AM a witness to the HORRORS on Earth.

I AM a witness to the PRIDE of MANKIND.

I AM a witness to the EVIL of DARKNESS.

OH MY DEAR GOD, I AM witness to HELL on EARTH !

By Bari Demers

MEANING OF HELL ON EARTH :

We are born on earth, believing this life of ours is a privilege. We govern ourselves believing we are doing right, but inside we know it’s all wrong. We humans may do as we please, without consequences. We like to think our laws of justice have real consequences, but really, it’s the living who prevail in the end, no matter how evil YOU are.

Our lives are filled with materialistic things which have no meaning. Our thirst for more hunts us to the day we die. We are never satisfied with what we have.

As it was written, it’s been said the meek shall inherit the Earth.

But in reality, the meek are nothing more then the ignorant. Our world is twisted with evil throughout our very existence. We like to believe we are doing right, but we know we are doing more harm, then good. Mankind leaves a trail of blood shed and destruction in its path, destroying everything we touch.

We begin to question all around us, why are things so wrong ?

Why are the weak, the poor, the vulnerable tortured ?

Why do we experience the worse in life, trying to make the best of life?

There is no justice. There is only pain.

It’s then we realize, we are the LIVING DEAD, already tortured throughout our lives until the day we are buried into the ground, into the dust of the forgotten.

WE are the living dead on earth – WE are on earth, living within the HELL of reality.

WE will grow old and die. This is indeed HELL, simply because, after this LIFE, there isn’t any life after death. This is the end of everything we know, soon to be forgotten in time.

WE must have been brought here from the Cosmos of Life in search of ourselves, only to realize there isn’t anything else.

WE are in a twisted fate of anguish – WE ARE ALL the living dead tortured on a hellish earth, spreading our seed of misery across the universe.

GOD has already given JUDGEMENT to us ALL.

Have a wonderful day – Welcome to Hell.

By Bari Demers – screenwriter/ storyteller

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BLACK ANGELS

I HAVE A VISION

I have a vision…

WHERE DID OUR ALIEN ANCESTORS GO?

What happened to them?

I believe I have the answer… my science fiction story BLACK ANGELS expresses the question mankind has asked since the beginning of time.

WHERE DID WE COME FROM – THE SYNOPSIS

In this answer my story follows a drug addicted war hero seeking revenge for his brothers death, willing to risk his crew in a mining expedition on planet AIPHA XL 420 ( known to us as EARTH). It’s essential they find a priceless RED CRYSTAL in order to save their species from a deadly virus.

KING OSIRIS ORDERS

MISSION : By order of King Osiris, his elite team, the ROYAL EMPEROR GUARDS are sent to a newly discovered planet, ALPHA XL 420 (known to us as EARTH) to mine a life saving drug known as the illusive RED CRYSTAL. It’s vital they find it, mine it and ship it back before a deadly virus wipes out their species.

THE EXPEDITION

Led by war hero Commander Cardin, along with eight military specialist and two A.I. androids, their mission is clear. Don’t come home until you find the most valuable crystal in the universe – RED CRYSTAL.

Adding to the dangerous mission, it’s been reported, their long time rivals, the JOTUNNS were recently spotted in the same solar system.

Commander Cardin will stop at nothing to honour his brothers death during the longest war in SIRIANS history – RED STORM.

REVENGE IS AS SWEET AS MILK AND HONEY

Destroying a colony of JOTUNNS would allow his brothers soul to be released on his journey into the afterlife, following the all mighty GOD ATUM.

Unknown to the crew, a creature, only spoke in folklore as BLACK ANGELS, possess planet ALPHA XL 420, spreading its evil darkness upon the earth.

PRIDE HAD CAST HIM DOWN…

O TO SACRED EARTH

A BLACK EVIL HAS SPREAD ACROSS THE LANDS…

O TO THE HORRORS OF EARTH

The fate of the SIRIANS – it’s inevitable.

Priestesses ISIS,THE GODS of SIRIUS, must protect her people at all costs.

Will the crew be able to save their species ?

I have a vision and this vision has already been written into earths history, long before mankind had a foothold on earth.

Let me tell you the story of BLACK ANGELS – our Alien Ancestors.

By Bari Demers – screenwriter

Our Nagging Brain

[ Poster Credit : Bari Demers – self taught graphic designer ]

WE humans are indeed a diverse species with millions of years of evolution, developing in who we are today. It may be our evolutionary timeline was drastically altered by our ancient ancestors, but overall WE have survived.

Interesting, our biological brain, still clouded with its mysterious beginnings, dictates our consciousness to do what we do. It’s the master of our biological body, controlling us everyday living on EARTH.

Only our brain knows our darkest secrets.

It feeds us with intel and safe guards, keeping our ‘Spiritual Being’ free from harm. That IS, only if, we listen to our inner thoughts. Somehow we have the option to reject our basic animalistic warnings, injecting ourselves to bodily harm. Complex our brain is, it too can be subject to all kinds of circuitry malfunction, from a birth defect to severe accidents. If our brain is healthy, firing up all its circuits, its amazing what WE humans can achieve.

Believing who we are can be complicated.

It’s clear our brain and consciousness are constantly fighting, trying to prove our very existence. The creation of man-made religion is clear of that, giving evidence to the battle inside of us all. Each tribe of human beings demanding our ‘religion’ is the right one. It has plagued us throughout our history, resorting mankind to its darkest moments of shame and incogitable terror.

Our consciousness (controlled by our brain) believe we have a soul. The brain tries to calculate why we exist. Who are we? Where do we come from ? Those two basic questions have divided mankind from the very beginning of existence.

To add insult to injury, our brain may think it’s all so powerful, becoming the savage dictators in our historical past and present, tormenting fellow human beings ; subjects to their rule.

On an individual basis, we are constantly fighting ourselves.

For example, I’ll give two different comical dialogues – my BRAIN talking to my ME.

FIRST DIALOGUE OF INNER THOUGHTS:

BRAIN : How do you feel ?

ME ( Consciousness) : Who me?

BRAIN : Yes you ! Who else am I talking to?

ME : Why does it matter ?

BRAIN : I need to know you are OK. Are you happy?

ME : Am I happy. No…I don’t think so. Most writers aren’t…

BRAIN : Why aren’t you happy ? What could make you a happy person?

ME : Finding my soul mate would help. Being financially secure would be another one. It would be nice if someone bought my screenplay BLACK ANGELS for $200,000. Then I could be financially secure.

BRAIN : You’re a dreamer!

ME : I know.

BRAIN : What do you believe would make that prefect soul mate ?

ME : Another female human being who has the same interests as me. Who backs me up, sharing identical views.

BRAIN : You realize I’m laughing inside…right? There’s no such thing as that prefect soul mate. It doesn’t exist. It doesn’t exist because human beings are constantly changing, growing from what they were in the beginning. Stop dreaming and be realistic !

ME : Wait a minute ! That’s what I do. I’m a dreamer and a lover of life. That IS why I write. My interest in ‘Space Exploration’ and defining WHO we are, explores my inner thoughts into words. That IS ME.

BRAIN : Me…me…me. It’s NOT all about YOU. You must of heard these words before,” A King has his reign, and then he dies. It’s inevitable.”

ME : I’m not a King !

BRAIN : No. But you ARE just another human being, trying to make his mark in life before you die, It’s inevitable. “ In this world, nothing is certain, except death and taxes.” Time is always against you.

ME : OK then! Thank you Brain for making my life seem so promising.

BRAIN : No problem!

ME : You realize I’m being sarcastic…right?

BRAIN : Of course I do ! After all I control your inner thoughts.

SECOND DIALOGUE OF INNER THOUGHTS:

BRAIN : Hello ?

ME: NOTHING. ZZZZZZZZ….

BRAIN : Hello?! Good Morning! Up and Atom.

ME : What ? What do you want?

BRAIN: It’s time to exercise that brain of yours. Come on …

ME : Yeah …yeah…do I have to ?

BRAIN : You must! I need me in top shape. So…let’s move those muscles. Get-up and begin your workout program. Up Up Up ! Besides, the rest of us had a talk.

ME: What ?! Who? What do you mean? Your such a crazy Brain.

BRAIN : I’ve just had a meeting with your heart, lungs and liver. They want me to be the spokesman. Actually, I’m the Leader of the Pack. Well…just between you and me, I’m much smarter than they will ever be.

ME: It sounds like a conspiracy to me. What did you all talk about?

BRAIN: The heart, lungs and liver say,” You’re doing a great job, but you must keep going. It’s essential to your health.”

ME: OK. But I don’t feel like it.

BRAIN: Too bad. Cry me a River! Let’s get out of bed and out that door.

ME : Ok ! Ok …fine! You’re such a nag sometimes.

CONCLUSION

In conclusion our brain dictates who we are. But is it our consciousness ? Do we have a soul ? Is there more then our physical existence? I choose to believe there is more…a lot more. And I’m NOT talking about man-made religion or the singular GOD in the sky.

No. I’m talking about SPIRITUALITY – OUR DESTINY.

Thank you nagging brain.

Bari Demers – screenwriter

JAMES MONTANA SCRIPTS

Alien Covenant Review

Warning : SPOILERS ALERT

Finally had the opportunity to watch ALIEN COVENANT this past month and I must say it was a little disappointing. Following Alien franchise since the beginning, the storyline is important to me. My first outburst of the movie was on Twitter :

“Saw @AlienAnthology #VFX astounding but #storyline upsetting. Astronauts have strict protocols. What happened, shouldn’t #AlienCovenant”

Let me explain :

NUMBER ONE

Any one hand-picked for a mission responsible for 2000 colonist, heading for distant planet Origae-6, would (in my mind) be highly trained Astronauts with strict protocols. Their responsibility is the welfare of colonist and not some rogue beacon on an unknown planet. Life-form or not, the DAVID android would make note-of-it, sending a electronic message back to earth through MUTHUR (MUTHUR is the Starship’s on-board main A.I. pronounced M-O-T-H-E-R).

If we were on Star Trek, Mr. Spock would definitely say,” It’s NOT logical. To make critical errors in judgment, threatening 2000 colonist is indeed unlikely.”

BUT – it’s a movie, meant to add precarious irrational decisions, causing complete havoc with no return. That’s what makes a movie exciting.

Screenwriters are trained to follow a specific Screenplay Outline, as are Directors. But Directors have the freedom to change whatever they want, as long as it makes a substantial profit at the box office. Here’s a quick layout :

1. ACT ONE – Establishment | Setup | Inciting Incident | Contemplation | Turning Point

2. ACT TWO – Acceleration | Enter Obstacles | Dead Centre | Crossing the Rubicon | Raising the Stakes | Crisis

3. ACT THREE – Prepare for Confrontation | Climatic Conflict | Aftermath and Resolution | Dissolution and Farewell

See HERE for in-depth detail.

The point is, there must be some kind of conflict and a series of mistakes to add tension to the movie, or else it would be pretty boring. For example, the real events and mishaps of Apollo 13 turned into a good movie, because the astronauts and NASA had to solve real problems in a dangerous environment. The iconic words, spoke the urgency…

“Houston, we’ve had a problem…”

It was indeed a life or death defining situation, where the whole world followed in their survival and safety back to earth from the moon.

That said, it’s vital the storyline makes sense or it becomes a jumbling mismatch puzzle with incoherent timelines, making us viewers grasp for reality. Knowing all to well Ridley Scott is a master Director, it seems ludicrous he wouldn’t tell a good storyline. After a little research, it wasn’t long before I realized the editing process of cutting scenes from Alien Covenant, proved to be the culprit. Ridley Scott’s creativity was hacked by removing crucial scenes by the editors involved. As a director I would be biting my upper lip, as scenes were eliminated.

Curiously, Ridley Scott still has full control of his movie.

So why did he approve of the Covenant crew making so many mistakes? Is it just a Hollywood ploy, to make fans see AWAKENING in order to get all the answers?

To me, this is how I would change the scene to make it work :

It would make more sense if android DAVID caused the INCIDENT, where he sent a deadly beam of energy disrupting the starships point-of-origin. It would be better then a random wave of CME ( Corona Mass Eruption) from a nearby star, as it happens in the movie. The scenes from that point would still hold true ; waking up the crew and killing their captain, due to a malfunction of his pod. In my mind, the burst of energy could have crippled the Starship to no return, causing it to crash on the planet where David is patiently waiting to carry out his deranged assault on the crew still alive. Crash landing on this planet would have made for a gripping terrifying scene.

NUMBER TWO

I love the fact Alien Covenant continues 10 years after my beloved movie Prometheus, so well executed by Ridley Scott. Personally watch Prometheus a dozen times to pick up eastereggs* I may have missed.

ON THAT NOTE :

To me I really don’t understand the backlash of Prometheus from fans. I realize the original ALIEN was basically a B-movie horror-slasher, but with its strong storyline and well executed ( pun intended ) actors, Alien did well at the box office. It was like this secret little gem waiting to be opened. That said, it’s my belief the fans of Alien, Aliens and so on, expect a horror slasher unconcerned about the science-fiction, the actual science and the clever plots Ridley Scott placed into Prometheus. It’s clear Ridley Scott caved to the wishes of its ALIEN fans, giving them the blood thirsty slasher ALIEN COVENANT.

[SPOILER ALERT FOR PROMETHEUS]

NUMBER THREE

If you followed Prometheus, you would be familiar with our lovely character Elizabeth Shaw, the last human surviver, along with David. We know Elizabeth doesn’t trust David, but she needs him to fly the Engineers Starship in order to answering the burning question she asked the Juggernaut,” Why did YOU (The Engineers) change your mind? What did we do wrong? Why do you want us dead?”

If I were Elizabeth, my trust in David would be nil. After fixing David and his ability to set course for Engineer’s HOMEWORLD using one of many alien Derelict spacecraft 🚀, I would immediately place David in stasis before doing the same myself. Any kind of tampering of my hyperbaric sleep chamber, would immediately set off an emergency alarm with instant release from stasis. So, in effect, Elizabeth would still be alive when Alien Covenant crew arrives, meaning a whole chain of events could take place.

I love the FINAL LOG of Dr. Shaw :

Elizabeth’s Final LOG, last survivor of Prometheus :

“The ship and her entire crew are gone. If you’re receiving this transmission, make no attempt to come to its point of origin. There is only death here now, and I’m leaving it behind. It is New Year’s Day, the year of our Lord, 2094. My name is Elizabeth Shaw, the last survivor of the Prometheus. And I am still searching.”

JAMES MONTANA’S FINAL LOG :

In conclusion, overall Alien Covenant seems to have gain support by the majority of fans, and in the end, that’s what really counts. 21st Century Fox covered the production budget cost of $97 million (reasonable, considering other scifi movies) making $238 million in sales.

Not bad, not bad at all.

I’m sure Ridley Scott was relieved he hit the mark for fans and certainly Fox must be pleased too. As a long time fan of the Alien Trilogy, can’t wait to see the release of Alien: Covenant sequel AWAKENING, apparently starts production in 14 months. If I had a choice of Directors for my Scifi BLACK ANGELS, Ridley Scott would be on the list. However, there’s a growing list of great Directors suited for my proposed film/pitch.

Bari Demersscreenwriter Read more of my stories and articlesEASTEREGGS*- Here are some neat (yup I used the word neat…sorry) little eastereggs you’ll find throughout the ALIEN TRILOGY.

SCIFI FRIDAY

Happy Friday Everyone!

I decided to rewrite one of my scifi stories on a different format other then WordPress in the attempts of allowing viewers to “gift” my efforts, if they choose to do so. Here’s the first page of the First Chapter of my Scifi online Book.

I hope you enjoy – CLICK HERE

Follow along here or on my new platform for continuing short stories in each Chapter of my online Book.

Thank you,

Bari Demers – screenwriter ” I envision a story and bring it to Life” BMD

PS – I hope you enjoy my latest art piece above.

Also : BLACK ANGELS “Pride had cast him down…Oh to Scared Earth. A Black Evil has spread across the Lands…O to the HORROR of Earth.

It’s inevitable!

BLACK ANGELS : A science-fiction horror genre based on the arrival of our Ancestors and how it changed mankind forever!